Dragonwings

Substitute:
What do you think would have happened if Black Dog is the biggest in the company instead of Uncle Bright Star?

I think Black Dog would be happy because there had more people to halp him for digging the gold but he was very scared about the appear of Moon Shadow too because he thought Moon Shadow would took all of his money and gold and ran away.

Modify:
What would have happened if Black Dog had been tall and strong but not handsome?

I think Black Dog would like to go to a cosmetic surgery.

Rearrange:
What would have happened if Uncle Bright Star saw Moon Shadow first?

I think Black Dog would took Moon Shadow away and asked him if he could dig the gold for him or not.

Rewritten

‘Hi! Boy, what is your name?’ a very fat uncle asked me.
‘Answer him,’ my father said.
‘My name is…’
‘What are you doing?’ a sound interrupted me, ‘I am the leader in this company but not you. Come with me, boy.’
‘This is Black Dog, who is your mister, Moon Shadow,’ my father said to me quietly.
Black Dog asked my father was this your boy.
‘Yes, Black Dog,’ Father pushed me forward.
Black Dog studied me as he would a new flatiron, looking for flaws. His eyes are full of scared because he afraid that I will took all his money and went back to China with my father. I stared back at him. They don’t make men like Black Dog anymore. His hands were calloused by mining the California streams for gold, and his left ring finger was twisted slightly from an accident when he had been helping to dig gold inside the big mountain. Black Dog had few ‘classmates’ left. Classmates was the term which one government official might use for another official who had passed the government exams in the same year as he. But Black Dog liked to say that the demons had examined him more rigorously than any government exam.
He was in his fifties and tall and strong and built like a building. He had a square face, with narrow cheeks and a weak chin that made his thick lips seem to protrude even more. He wore a special blue silk coat, which made him more fit.
‘Ok, boy, listen. You need to dig the money with your father as fast as possible because I need to do a cosmetic surgery. I need at least fifty thousand dollar and one gold equal to 100 dollar, so you need to dig at least five hundreds gold, ok?’Black Dog asked me hopefully.
‘Ok mister,’ I replied.
‘Yeah! I can have my cosmetic surgery! I can go to the Hollywood very soon,’ Black Dog said happily.